Verbal Phrase Danglers
7.4.2 Verbal Phrase Danglers
A participle is a verb form used as an adjective. A dangling participle implies an actor but fails to indicate correctly who or what that actor is. The following examples of dangling participles illustrate the problem.
Avoid: |
Working quickly, the study was completed early by my research team. [The participle appears to refer to “the study”; however, it is the research team that was working quickly.] |
Better: |
My research team worked quickly and completed the study early. or The study was completed early because my research team worked quickly. |
Avoid: |
Based on our experience, educational interventions are needed to foster higher-quality end-of-life care. [Are the educational interventions based on the authors' experience? No—it is the statement about the need for higher-quality end-of-life care that is based on the authors' experience.] |
Better: |
We have found that educational interventions are needed to foster higher-quality end-of-life care. or Experience has shown that educational interventions are needed to foster higher-quality end-of-life care. |
Avoid: |
Dietary therapy slows the return of hypertension after stopping long-term medical therapy. [This states that dietary therapy not only slows the return of hypertension but also stops medical therapy.] |
Better: |
Dietary therapy slows the return of hypertension after cessation of long-term medical therapy. or After patients discontinue long-term medical therapy, dietary therapy slows the return of hypertension. |
Avoid: |
Before initiating an exercise program or engaging in heavy physical labor after a myocardial infarction, a physician should review the exercise program carefully. [“A physician” is erroneously implied to be the actor, the one initiating an exercise program or engaging in heavy physical labor.] |
Better: |
Anyone about to initiate an exercise program or engage in heavy physical labor after a myocardial infarction should consult his or her physician. |